Transcription - Story Progress

During the 2nd tutorial with Alan, I discussed yet another idea. Having already gone through a phase of scrapping the first song and staring from square one, then back to the first song again, I was hoping that this time I had something more concrete. I got a green light of sorts. It was decided that there were just a few things that needed resolving, but the core idea is there. And yes, the bear is in it, but not with slippers. No, this time, its with a pillow!

Anyway, I have been working on (as suggested in the tutorial) a detailed storyline of events, which have both the lyrics and timing synced with the new story. It also has some basic camera and compositional notes next to it too. Its in the form of a table.

While I have typed up everything that I was thinking of (with a few of the suggested changes from the tutorials too), it is incomplete. There are a few gaps where I'm undecided of what or how the action on screen will take place. Some parts in in greater detail than others.
Over the next day or so It will gradually become more complete. Of course feel free to post your thoughts on what's here so far.

This is what I have so far.

Transcription Story 1st Draft


I'm thinking that while I try to fill in the gaps, I will begin storyboarding some of the other scenes. Particularly as the last few posts have been rather wordy and is about time I blog some drawings. Any other suggestions for the story are most welcome.